SWA #21

Student #3 The issue in this essay is deforestation. It is explained in the beginning that deforestation is a growing problem with no effective solution. The four different perspectives of four different groups, the indigenous people, the businesses, the medical researchers, and the environmentalists, are easy to spot. The thesis does not say anything about the four different viewpoints but rather two possible solutions to the problem. The student effectively uses the introduction and conclusion as he starts with an outside perspective and ends by explaining his own views on the subject. Yes I think the essay is somewhat effective. It is not very interesting or emotional, but it gets the job done. I would have told this student to add a little more flair to the essay along with adding some statistics to his or her findings.